Iliana Essay 3


The best thing that happen to me

 

Final Draft

 

 

When I was a little girl my mother took me to a restaurant I Mexico. (S) The restaurant is made for kids to play It had a lot of games machines and a little bar for teens. (CS) As we were eating we have a lot of fun. (S) She told me how much she loves me and how much she care of me. (CS) Although we finish our food me and her went to the game machines to play as we were having allot of fun she gave me a hug. (CS, CX) We were t playing together with out interruptions so, we forgot about the time in fact, time passes by and we didn’t notice. (CS, CX) Every time I remember my heart beat so fast so, I feel happy like if it would be yesterday. (CS)

 

 

Essay # 3

When I was a little girl my mother took me to a restaurant I Mexico. (S) The restaurant is made for kids to play It had a lot of games machines and a little bar for teens. (CS) As, we were eating we have a lot of fun. (S) She told me how much she loves me and how much she care of me. (CS) Although, we finish our food me and her went to the game machines to play as we were having allot of fun she gave me a hug. (CS, CX) We were t playing together with out interruptions so, we forgot about the time in fact, time passes by and we didn’t notice. (CS, CX) Every time I remember my heart beat so fast so, I feel happy like if it would be yesterday. (CS)

 

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